Comment posted Jan.29th, 2013, viewed 33 times
Hello Dan, fantastic work! I am impressed with the dedication that you are showing and the amount of practice that you have put in. Your facial features are all very good and I can see the improvement that you made with each so it was great seeing the progression:) The best thing to do, is try to see the shape as a three dimensional form on the paper while you are shading. Imagine how the top of the ear curves out off the surface of the paper but sinks back into the page as the tones darken...or how the top of the eyelid curves out from the bulging of the eyeball catching more of the light.
Here are just a few tips to help you improve even more...
Eye- This is a wonderful eye, Dan! I especially like the texture in the Iris area
A-The shape of the eye opening can be adjusted if we are drawing the eye in the notes. The eyelid is made up of three lines on the top lid and 3 on the bottom and on each person they are slightly different, so it is really important to accurately draw these 3 angles in order to gain a good likeness. Have another look at the image in your notes to compare. .. this is great for now... just something to keep in mind for the future.
B- the folds that make up the area around the eye are important too in gaining a good likeness. The angle of this fold needs adjusting, compare to the image in your notes.
C- Darken all along here under the top eyelid… adding a shadow here will add depth
D- these eyelashes are perhaps a bit too thick.. well done on tapering the ends though.
E- Try using your putty eraser to create a highlight here
Nose-Very good, it is just the shadow shape that could be adjusted....the shape of the shadows and highlights are equally as important as the shape of the outline drawing itself.. Squinting helps you to see the shapes
A- This shadow shape needs slight adjustment , Great shadow edge here :)
B- The tone on top of the nostrils needs to be adjusted. If the tones on both sides are too similar the nose will look flat so we want to make the one on the left appear lighter ( level 2) because it is closer to the light source 2... the tone on top of the right nostril should be a level 3 because it is farther away from the light. Blend all around to make the transitions from darker to lighter tones smoother. Compare to the image in your notes
C- The pencil marks are a little too obvious, be careful with the tip of your pencil, it can create lines and ridges.
D-There is a little edge along here; between the two tones. A gradation was needed here instead
Lips- Beautiful, you have done really well to copy the shadow shapes to give them form...
The center lip line shape just needs adjustment ( if we are drawing the lips in your notes) The lip line is one of the most important features when trying to achieve the likeness of your subject. Try halving the full length of the lips , then halve the distance again on both your drawing and the image you are working from. Then just draw one section at a time.
Ear- Fantastic! Just a few of the tones need adjusting to give it more depth...otherwise it is great!
A-Make this hard edge crisper
B-The tones gradiate too quickly here, just take your 2B and blend this area more
C-The tones here are too light and should gradiate slowly out from a 2 to a 3 Compare to the image in your notes
D- Nice level 6 here:) The tones just need to gradiate more smoothly out to the level 3 reflected light area
E- The outline is a bit too prominent just use a thin strip of level 2 shading before slowly gradiating to a 3
Always take a moment when finished to look for any areas that need refining...look to see that the tones are in the correct areas, take your HB, 2B or 4B as required to smooth gradations. Look for hard edges that could crisper, that sort of thing..You have done very well and this is excellent work for this level of the course! You are growing leaps and bounds! Keep going!
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